Poem Review?

[RonE]

Then what should I write about, huh? Should I write about the POS running the country? I'm more than willing to do that. Or should I write about the freedom from this country? Wait what freedom? Mr. O is taking away a lot of it. Or should I write about all the happy horseshit that doesn't go on in this country? Any of you guys ever hear about Fukushima stuff; you know the nuclear spill from Japan? Well it's been a while since thats happen. All that radiation that was in te ocean around Japan has now spread is starting to invade the Americas. The stupidest thing for man kind to ever do was fuck with nuclear energy and power. You can't kill the ocean with out killing the people. Sciencetis say we came from the ocean. I bet you haven't seen or heard a single word about have you? Because CNN, ABC, FOX; they either don't know bout it themselves or they're too ignorant to realize the dangers of it to report it. Just because I'm "a kid" is bullshit. If you want to learn something about this country, go to this website: americanthinker.com and read some of the articles. CNN and other news channels tend to be full of shit.

I'd recommend you'd write about pussy but we all know you haven't experienced that either

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[Redbeard]

Then what should I write about, huh? Should I write about the POS running the country? I'm more than willing to do that. Or should I write about the freedom from this country? Wait what freedom? Mr. O is taking away a lot of it. Or should I write about all the happy horseshit that doesn't go on in this country? Any of you guys ever hear about Fukushima stuff; you know the nuclear spill from Japan? Well it's been a while since thats happen. All that radiation that was in te ocean around Japan has now spread is starting to invade the Americas. The stupidest thing for man kind to ever do was fuck with nuclear energy and power. You can't kill the ocean with out killing the people. Sciencetis say we came from the ocean. I bet you haven't seen or heard a single word about have you? Because CNN, ABC, FOX; they either don't know bout it themselves or they're too ignorant to realize the dangers of it to report it. Just because I'm "a kid" is bullshit. If you want to learn something about this country, go to this website: americanthinker.com and read some of the articles. CNN and other news channels tend to be full of shit.

I'd recommend you'd write about pussy but we all know you haven't experienced that either

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Haha already seen it but it still cracks me up

[assateague]

Telling a story through poem from the accounts of others (as Key did), and showing your emotions from the accounts of others are two different things...

to be fair, Key was at the battle. if i remember right he was the dinner guest of a British captain, and was being held temporarily so that Key couldn't tell the patriots the british battle plan.

On a ship in the harbor.

[banknote]

Call me a fag

you asked for it, fag.

So GGG of you. Spanks!

[Bootlipkiller]

You should write a poem about self-righteousness.

that was great!

[(MT)Montanafowler]

Telling a story through poem from the accounts of others (as Key did), and showing your emotions from the accounts of others are two different things...

to be fair, Key was at the battle. if i remember right he was the dinner guest of a British captain, and was being held temporarily so that Key couldn't tell the patriots the british battle plan.

On a ship in the harbor.

that's what i said

[rebelp74]

These seriously made laugh

You should write a poem about self-righteousness.

Posers^

[rebelp74]

Seriously RMFC write about 7.5 shot or how to not score on a date.

[aunt betty]

You guys ease up on Rex, he can write about whatever he can imagine. The following was written by a person who never entered the service, never came close to battle and still managed to explain things succinctly. So give Rex a break.

The Charge of the Light Brigade




Half a league, half a league,
[EM SPACE] Half a league onward,
All in the valley of Death,
[EM SPACE] Rode the six hundred.
'Forward, the Light Brigade!
Charge for the guns' he said:
Into the valley of Death
[EM SPACE] Rode the six hundred.

'Forward, the Light Brigade!'
Was there a man dismay'd?
Not tho' the soldiers knew
[EM SPACE] Some one had blunder'd:
Theirs not to make reply,
Theirs not to reason why,
Theirs but to do and die:
Into the valley of Death
[EM SPACE] Rode the six hundred.

Cannon to right of them,
Cannon to left of them,
Cannon in front of them
[EM SPACE] Volley'd and thunder'd;
Storm'd at with shot and shell,
Boldly they rode and well,
Into the jaws of Death,
Into the mouth of Hell
[EM SPACE] Rode the six hundred.

Flash'd all their sabres bare,
Flash'd as they turned in air
Sabring the gunners there,
Charging an army while
[EM SPACE] All the world wonder'd:
Plunged in the battery-smoke
Right thro' the line they broke;
Cossack and Russian
Reel'd from the sabre-stroke
Shatter'd and sunder'd.
Then they rode back, but not
Not the six hundred.

Cannon to right of them,
Cannon to left of them,
Cannon behind them
[EM SPACE] Volley'd and thunder'd;
Storm'd at with shot and shell,
While horse and hero fell,
They that had fought so well
Came thro' the jaws of Death,
Back from the mouth of Hell,
All that was left of them,
[EM SPACE] Left of six hundred.

When can their glory fade?
O the wild charge they made!
[EM SPACE] All the world wonder'd.
Honour the charge they made!
Honour the Light Brigade,
[EM SPACE] Noble six hundred!

Comparing Red mutherfucking Chapman to LT Alfred is wrong.

[aunt betty]

It doesn't matter if you're writing about putting your fucking socks on just after they came out of the drier; write about something you've EXPERIENCED, following the advice the teacher gave you about using sensory descriptors - color, odor, flavor, etc. - and write about the feeling of that experience the way YOU felt it. Call me a fag, but that's how you write a poem.

This guy knows how to follow instructions.